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This article became a good aricle almost three years ago and since then the subject's career has greatly escalated with him playing for his country at the world cup.

I think this aricle needs another proper review to make sure it covers everything.

Thanks, BUC (talk) 12:49, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Sandman888 (talk) Latest FAC 19:55, 17 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lead
  • "Milner's talent in football, cricket, and long-distance running was recognised when he was a child. He represented his school in these sports and played football for amateur teams from Rawdon and Horsforth. " doesn't read great.
  • "only" POV
  • it reads like he stills plays for Newcastle. please expand/rewrite last section.
Early life
  • what's "11 GCES"?
  • "Milner took as much interest in watching football as he did playing it. " OR
  • "Peter and Lesley," unimportant
  • "played for the Republic of Ireland at under-14 level" doesnt match infobox
  • "against Italy, Czech Republic and Brazil, scoring a goal against Brazil.[8]" reads poorly
Club career
  • More pov:
    • with a deft first touch of the ball and manoeuvre
    • Milner continued to impress
  • [who?]:
    • He could be deemed a traditional English winger.
  • the whole style of play reads really poorly.
References
  • Don't mix date formats, keep to DD MONTH YYYY

Decent article. I might do some more, but that should get something going. Consider reviewing History of FC Barcelona. Sandman888 (talk) Latest FAC 19:55, 17 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]